Comments on: two

By: Robert Mansperger

Robert Mansperger — Wed, 04 Apr 2007 17:00:41 +0000

I love how you’ve used stark black and white in a highly stylized approach to tell the story so far. Very dramatic, quiet, and sad. While in a realistic sense the lighting is off - you’ve established an atmosphere and weight to the images that wouldn’t work well otherwise.

Can’t wait to see how this progresses.

By: Esteban Pedreros

Esteban Pedreros — Mon, 02 Apr 2007 03:03:09 +0000

I’ll try, but I’m as square as a dice.

By: azaceta

azaceta — Sat, 31 Mar 2007 17:19:00 +0000

Esteban–

Once you let go of trying to “get things right”, you’ll realize what a great use of blacks that page is. The best artist don’t go for “right”.

By: Esteban Pedreros

Esteban Pedreros — Fri, 30 Mar 2007 19:21:48 +0000

I’m sorry, i didn’t mean to be an ass… I just think that the light is wrong

By: k-

k- — Fri, 30 Mar 2007 19:11:09 +0000

geez stuart. learn how to draw, would you?

and i’m not sure that third panel is really ok.

By: xoshua

xoshua — Fri, 30 Mar 2007 16:49:24 +0000

definitely curious to see where this is going.

By: Esteban Pedreros

Esteban Pedreros — Fri, 30 Mar 2007 15:50:50 +0000

I kind of like the sequence, but I have a couple of observations:

First panel: everything ok, lights make sense

Second panel: Why is the woman’s face visible, there is exactly the same amount of light in the oom as seen on the first panel, and the light fom above should readh the woman’s face… it should light the man’s upper body either.

third panel: ok

fourth panel: The man’s back shouldn’t have any light on, you should have repeated the light effect from the first panel, and the position of the door seems to have changed from the first panel.

fifth panel: once again, the upper side of the woman’s body shouldn’t have any light on it.

Well, I hope no to be a wet blanket, I just wanted to help.